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Yutaka Nagakura Special Jounin
Posts : 124 Join date : 2015-03-21 Age : 24 Location : Land of Water
| Subject: Zengoranme (All-Seeing Eye) of the Nagakura Clan Fri Mar 27, 2015 5:06 am | |
| Originating Clan: Uchiha and Hyuuga Appearance: - Spoiler:
History: The bloodline was manifested after those from the Land of Fire who were once in the Hyuuga and Uchiha clan became part of the Nagakura clan, a clan of wanderers and the members of the Hyuuga and Uchiha had intercourse with each other creating the Zengoranme after generations of the Hyuga and Uchiha mixing within the Nagakura clan. Soon the whole clan obtained this after DNA was implanted into most of the members after the Doujutsu was manifested. What it does: The Zengoranme (All-Seeing Eye) also referred to as MyĆsekigan (Life Eye) allows the user to see the opponents chakra and allows them to remember it, the doujutsu has inherited this skill from both the Byakugan and Sharingan it originates from. The ability Sharingan has allows them to see the color of the chakra allowing them to remember it to distinguish someone from friend or foe and the Byakugan allows them to see and track the chakra from long distances. The eye also allows the user to create a mental map of the area granting them a 150 meter coverage of the area around them in all directions. The eyes increases your throwing speed by 2 Ranks, your overall speed by 1 Rank and your reaction time by 1 Rank. Requirements: 2,000 words of training with the Nagakura's Ash Release is required to manifest this Doujutsu. It takes 1,000 words to identify and remember chakra Chakra Cost: C-Rank to activate/D-Rank to maintain
Last edited by Yutaka Nagakura on Wed Apr 22, 2015 2:41 am; edited 7 times in total | |
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Pain Academy
Posts : 325 Join date : 2015-01-11 Age : 26
Character sheet Character Name: Rikaro Uchiha Clan: Uchiha Element: Wind, Water, Earth
| Subject: Re: Zengoranme (All-Seeing Eye) of the Nagakura Clan Fri Mar 27, 2015 7:19 am | |
| Ok I'm going to be honest with you. You left out some key points for the see chakra part tell how many meters you can see the chakra and how good you can see the chakra is it on Byakugan level or Sharingan. Also for the mental map how big is the map in a square structure. And for the deadly accuracy with senbim and stuff I suggest you change that up and say you get 50+ added to throwing speed and your base speed also put a CP on the bloodline | |
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Yutaka Nagakura Special Jounin
Posts : 124 Join date : 2015-03-21 Age : 24 Location : Land of Water
| Subject: Re: Zengoranme (All-Seeing Eye) of the Nagakura Clan Fri Mar 27, 2015 7:20 am | |
| This is a stupid question but what is a CP? xD | |
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Pain Academy
Posts : 325 Join date : 2015-01-11 Age : 26
Character sheet Character Name: Rikaro Uchiha Clan: Uchiha Element: Wind, Water, Earth
| Subject: Re: Zengoranme (All-Seeing Eye) of the Nagakura Clan Fri Mar 27, 2015 7:22 am | |
| -_- if you do not know what CP is you should read the rules.
But CP or chakra points is the chakra given to you to use jutsu. If your chakra is 100 you have 1000 CP to use jutsu with. Some jutsu may cost 60CP to use given you 940CP left over when u use it. So thus bloodline needs a CP cost you should look at other doujutsu to get a idea | |
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Yutaka Nagakura Special Jounin
Posts : 124 Join date : 2015-03-21 Age : 24 Location : Land of Water
| Subject: Re: Zengoranme (All-Seeing Eye) of the Nagakura Clan Fri Mar 27, 2015 7:24 am | |
| Yeah, I thought it was Chakra points but in the phrase you put it, it didn't make that much sense to be there. | |
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Pain Academy
Posts : 325 Join date : 2015-01-11 Age : 26
Character sheet Character Name: Rikaro Uchiha Clan: Uchiha Element: Wind, Water, Earth
| Subject: Re: Zengoranme (All-Seeing Eye) of the Nagakura Clan Fri Mar 27, 2015 7:27 am | |
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Yutaka Nagakura Special Jounin
Posts : 124 Join date : 2015-03-21 Age : 24 Location : Land of Water
| Subject: Re: Zengoranme (All-Seeing Eye) of the Nagakura Clan Fri Mar 27, 2015 7:34 am | |
| I'm more use to AP and fixed! Hope it's better, if it doesn't make sense I'll edit it some more. | |
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Pain Academy
Posts : 325 Join date : 2015-01-11 Age : 26
Character sheet Character Name: Rikaro Uchiha Clan: Uchiha Element: Wind, Water, Earth
| Subject: Re: Zengoranme (All-Seeing Eye) of the Nagakura Clan Fri Mar 27, 2015 3:57 pm | |
| Change the originating from Sharingan and Byakuga. Stuff please and I was saying the doujutsu raised your speed by 25 as well as your reaction time and your throwing speed by 50 | |
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Yutaka Nagakura Special Jounin
Posts : 124 Join date : 2015-03-21 Age : 24 Location : Land of Water
| Subject: Re: Zengoranme (All-Seeing Eye) of the Nagakura Clan Fri Mar 27, 2015 6:28 pm | |
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Pain Academy
Posts : 325 Join date : 2015-01-11 Age : 26
Character sheet Character Name: Rikaro Uchiha Clan: Uchiha Element: Wind, Water, Earth
| Subject: Re: Zengoranme (All-Seeing Eye) of the Nagakura Clan Fri Mar 27, 2015 6:37 pm | |
| Sorry but change the Mao thing to 150 meters | |
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Yutaka Nagakura Special Jounin
Posts : 124 Join date : 2015-03-21 Age : 24 Location : Land of Water
| Subject: Re: Zengoranme (All-Seeing Eye) of the Nagakura Clan Fri Mar 27, 2015 6:44 pm | |
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Pain Academy
Posts : 325 Join date : 2015-01-11 Age : 26
Character sheet Character Name: Rikaro Uchiha Clan: Uchiha Element: Wind, Water, Earth
| Subject: Re: Zengoranme (All-Seeing Eye) of the Nagakura Clan Fri Mar 27, 2015 6:52 pm | |
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Yutaka Nagakura Special Jounin
Posts : 124 Join date : 2015-03-21 Age : 24 Location : Land of Water
| Subject: Re: Zengoranme (All-Seeing Eye) of the Nagakura Clan Tue Apr 07, 2015 8:08 pm | |
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Roland Ootsutsuki Owner
Posts : 1195 Join date : 2015-03-07
Character sheet Character Name: Roland Clan: Ootsutsuki Element: Fire, Wind, Earth
| Subject: Re: Zengoranme (All-Seeing Eye) of the Nagakura Clan Sat Apr 11, 2015 5:31 pm | |
| Need a WC for how long it takes to identify and remember chakra, and will need a chakra cost for the eyes. | |
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Yutaka Nagakura Special Jounin
Posts : 124 Join date : 2015-03-21 Age : 24 Location : Land of Water
| Subject: Re: Zengoranme (All-Seeing Eye) of the Nagakura Clan Tue Apr 21, 2015 8:55 am | |
| WC was included and the eyes had a cost, changed it to chakra cost instead of action cost. (Probably where the confusion kicked in, it was a template from an older doujutsu on the site) | |
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Roland Ootsutsuki Owner
Posts : 1195 Join date : 2015-03-07
Character sheet Character Name: Roland Clan: Ootsutsuki Element: Fire, Wind, Earth
| Subject: Re: Zengoranme (All-Seeing Eye) of the Nagakura Clan Tue Apr 21, 2015 11:13 am | |
| Bump the words up to 1,000, bump up the costs. Then I can approve this. | |
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Yutaka Nagakura Special Jounin
Posts : 124 Join date : 2015-03-21 Age : 24 Location : Land of Water
| Subject: Re: Zengoranme (All-Seeing Eye) of the Nagakura Clan Wed Apr 22, 2015 2:42 am | |
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Roland Ootsutsuki Owner
Posts : 1195 Join date : 2015-03-07
Character sheet Character Name: Roland Clan: Ootsutsuki Element: Fire, Wind, Earth
| Subject: Re: Zengoranme (All-Seeing Eye) of the Nagakura Clan Wed Apr 22, 2015 11:42 am | |
| - Quote :
- bump up the costs
People say fixed all the time yet they just miss stuff. Bump up the costs of activation and use to fit the benefits. | |
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